Working on a letter to publishers, help me

I really want to have my Christian fiction book traditionally published.  Part of the process is sending letters (called Query Letters) to Agents to see if they will pick up my book.

There is the body of a letter I am working on.  IF you were an agent and received this letter, would you:

A. Want to read a little more of the book?

B. Think that this story line might sell?

C. Want to invest your time into contacting publishers you know to offer them the rights to the book.

Body of the letter:

My first fiction book is titled “He Is Not Alone”.  At 99,840 words it is ready for publication.  “He Is Not Alone” is a Christian fiction book dealing with the Second Coming of Christ and the events leading up to saving the world.

What happens when a common man is given powers by God to save mankind and the Government feels he cannot be trusted and would rather he was dead?  Will is a 30 year old black man who God has given the power to hear and control man’s thoughts, cure the body, save or cause death and control earthly objects. The FBI doesn’t trust him and twice try to kill him.  The religious community considers him the Second Coming of Christ as he displays powers no man has ever had as he cures the terminally ill, brings a child back to life and even causes the death of several FBI agents.  In the end he saves the world from nuclear destruction.  Like Noah, he accomplishes his mission, but then what?  Will dies while preaching to a congregation.  As his spirit leaves his body, he has one last message, You Are Not Alone.

As a novice writer, in the past, I have co-written SQL Server articles and two chapters in two SQL Server 7 books.  I have written and self-published several articles on multiple subjects.  My first self-published pamphlet was “How To Make Unlimited Platinum in Everquest”.  It sold well over 2000 copies on eBay before I left the game. I also wrote a booklet called “Starting An Embroidery Business”.  My latest series is called the Perfect RV.  It is also self-published on Amazon and covers finding, buying and using the Perfect RV based on the needs of the reader.  “He Is Not Alone” is my first fictional book.  I have recently completed my second Christian fiction book titled “Kansas City Volcano”.  I am currently writing “Full-timing for Retirees in the Perfect RV”.

Thank you, <Agent Name> for your time and consideration of “He Is Not Alone”.  I look forward to working with you as He Is Not Alone is published and made available Christians and Non-Christians alike.

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Please leave comments or send me an email at rlaubert (at) gmail.com

Did God have a hand in He Is Not Alone

As I read “He Is Not Alone” and listen to the sermons at church over the last few months at church, I am amazed at the number of correlations between the Bible and the book. Even small things that happen to Will at times are found in the Bible. Could it be that GOD was co-writing this to help us better understand his word?

When I first started writing He Is Not Alone, it was suppose to be a Science Fiction book for a class I was taking with James Patterson.  In fact the first half of the book does not tie in with religion in any way and was going to be the first book in a series.  As I started writing the second book in the series that things changed.  First, I quickly learned that the two books would not stand on their own and ended up combining them.  Second my understanding of the story line changed.  It became apparent that Will had a mission.  Soon that mission had to come from somewhere.  Will’s powers had to have a reason and a source.  As I wrote the story I found it easier at times to write.  Sometimes I couldn’t type fast enough to keep the words flowing.

I hope you enjoy “He Is Not Alone”.  I would appreciate any feedback or comments on the book.

He Is Not Alone

Will Symthe awakes from a coma after a car accident and finds his wife is dead. He soon discovers that he has some unique abilities, starting with he can understand the thoughts of man. He soon learns that he can also control the thoughts of those he is around.

As he begins to understand what he is capable of, a dilemma starts to build, what to do with his abilities. He wants to use his abilities to help mankind, the government would rather he was dead. Will has to find out what he is destine to do while staying alive and convincing the government to leave him alone.

A surprise is in store, he is not alone.

 

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Raymond Laubert

Raymond Laubert is a retired Veteran and full time traveler. He and his wife, Daisy, travel around he country in their motor home, enjoying retirement.

Raymond has written many non-fictional books including the series “The Perfect RV” which is available on his RV Inspection Service website (http://rv-inspection-service.com).

The He Is Not Alone book is the first in a series of books dealing with mans ability to go beyond his physical mind and into the minds of others. The second book in the series finds Will, the main character, finding out that there are others like him and how they can help mankind.

Raymond and his wife have been married for 45 years and have 4 children, 13 grandchildren and 3 great grandchildren. They travel the country in a motor home with their two dogs. He is a retired Veteran of the US Air Force with over 21 years service.

Raymond maintains several websites including his blog Our RV Adventures (http://our-rv-adventures), his recipe website The Weekend Chef (http://theweekendchef.com) and a small web hosting site RD-Webhosting (http://rd-webhosting.com).